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When reading Jason Ward’s “Industrial Design Student Connects with Great "mecha" Makers” In Is clear that he, much like myself is still new to the format of online writing according to the advice of MollySnyder. When comparing his article to the many notes that she had the first thing that I noticed was that he was not very short and concise in introducing his topic of choice in the article. In his work we see that after his hook, he introduces us to his subject and then the purpose for the article. Looking at Snyder's advice I feel like we should be introduced to the main topic that the article will be exploring and then going to into introducing that two main focus's of the article. Another part of this is that while Ward's article is not one of the longer reads I have had it still manages to seem to drag on longer than I think it should. I feel that after around the first half of the article I dont need to read farther as Ir really doesn't bring more information pertaining directly to the main focus of the article. I also thinks Ward's article has some good points that follow right along with Snyder's advice. Some of these key things that I see are, subheads, hyperlinks and the clear voice that Ward bring through the work.
Jason Ward's Article: https://onmilwaukee.com/articles/miad-series-making-mecha
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I think that Jason McDowell has a very different voice from whom we have read, being Todd Morozinski. While their subjects are different in the articles they have written, there is also a distinct difference in the language and format that they apply. In Jason McDowell’s case, he uses a very matter-of-fact tone and really lets the reality of the situation that he shows set in. This can be seen throughout his article, “Buildings Demolished for Parking Lots” where he states, “No matter what the reason is for demolition, it's still a shame to see a classic cream city brick building replaced with the personality of a parking lot. It removes the three-dimensional history and replaces it with a flat surface that can only hold two states: empty or littered. Nobody looks at a parking lot and says, "That is beautiful," nor do travelers book their vacation plans based on the aesthetics and convenience of parking lots.” With this blurb, he really brings the emotion and feeling of the article to a more serious tone and really makes the reader question these parking lots that the average person never really thinks about. Jason McDowell is a person that really cares about his city and has not shown any shortage of his passion for the Milwaukee area. I think that his passion is where he finds his voice for his articles and it comes through how much he wants to see the best for the city.
Article: https://onmilwaukee.com/articles/buildings-demolished-for-parking-lots When it comes to writing articles I think it is important for every author to adhere and create their own voice. The range of voice that is seen throughout the internet is key to making something unique and can even influence the audience that seeks you out. When it comes to building and recognizing someone’s voice I feel that a lot of it comes from the words that are used and the tone they are conveyed in as well as the subjects that they choose to note. One notable example I have reviewed is Todd Mrozinski and his articles.
Todd Mrozinski Articles: “Portrait Society Show Packs Emotional Punch” - https://urbanmilwaukee.com/2019/08/21/visual-art-portrait-society-show-packs-emotional-punch/?fbclid=IwAR0kNGMTiGN7tbhKaNTBLdiGTXa8R_poI57JG5aHHibVa4LI64u7ONAAyWk “The Power of Great Paintings” - https://urbanmilwaukee.com/2020/02/18/visual-art-the-power-of-great-paintings/ ____________________________________________________________________________ “Portrait Society Show Packs Emotional Punch” The article, “Portrait Society Show Packs Emotional Punch” is a very abstract and yet grounding work that walks the reader through the gallery of Inside/Out. The piece itself wants you to be right beside Todd Mrozinski as he walks through the galleries. With the language and style of Mrozinski, he fits very well into the author role and really makes you want to be partaking in viewing this gallery. I feel that his voice comes through to help this article a lot. The subject is loose and has no real physical definitions so that the interpretation really comes to the viewer. A good example of this is when Mrozinski states, “have a quiet mood unto themselves and are a subtle accompaniment to the cornucopia of flowers and vines which pop and pulsate with curves and corpulent juiciness in the foreground.” In this statement we see Mrozinski letting Thomas Haneman work in a way, speak for itself. Another aspect of Mrozinski’s voice here is the soft words and his talk as though this was a very intimate moment for himself. This is especially obvious when it comes to Mrozinski talking about M.Winston and his videos on the gallery he states, “As I emerge through the black curtains I leave the gallery teary-eyed, with a renewed sense of the healing and transformative power of art.” I would say that Mrozinski has a good voice for this article as it deals with abstraction in Mrozinski likes to use his works to lead you into your imagination so that you’re in the abstraction while not being at the show. However, I also feel that this detaches me from the works and those abstractions that the artist wants us to see. In this telling of this show, I feel that there is a disconnect between what the artist wants us to interpret and what Mrozinski shows us. There is a very mellow and kind feeling Mrozinski brings to this article and yet I feel that with some of the context provided this should be heavier and more intense at points. ____________________________________________________________________________ “The Power of Great Paintings” In “The Power of Great Paintings” Todd Mrozinski seems to have a very enthusiastic and almost childlike wonder when it comes to viewing these galleries. As he travels through each exhibit it’s a thought he had mounted a camera on his shoulder and it had translated its views into text for everyone to read. This was never more clear to me than when he started describing the Berthe Morisot painting. In his description, he states, “The variety of brushstrokes seems to be responding to the conversation they are having; each woman is painted with mysterious features that emerge and dissolve depending on your distance from the piece.” This statement while analytical is very strong at conveying the image of the work. Another great point in the article where Mrozinski’s voice really shines through is near the end where he is viewing Chaim Soutine’s. He states, “ spot a painting I have known and loved for years, Chaim Soutine’s “The Pheasant”. It is a still life of a dead pheasant laying on a white cloth. The canvas becomes a casket and the paint, applied with stunning directness, becomes the internal organs. My favorite area in this painting is where Soutine has literally filleted the painting…” I think that Mrozinski is a very strong author and his voice is very clear in his works. When he writes you can see the excitement and passion behind his words and I hope to one day bring that into my writing There are definitely a lot of headlines that try to turn heads. In every single one of the articles, there seems to be at least one piece of photography. It’s interesting how many articles are written by one person that is not even a part of the OnMilwaukee team. There also appears to be a way to separate the articles by their associated categories.
https://onmilwaukee.com/ The article is only 500-1500 words long which is not something that I was expecting from a professionally written article. The article gets straight to the point and then goes further into the detail of the specific topic. They then tell you why this matters and try to connect it to the community around them. Finally, they give more details on the news itself and promote the focus of the piece. Links for Notes: https://onmilwaukee.com/articles/odd-duck-moving-to-walkers-point https://onmilwaukee.com/articles/outdoordrinkingguide |
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